I want to be a Eagle!
학생이 쓴 원문
Because eagle is a bird and the most powerful bird. Since in the past, when I think of animals, I think of birds. As someone who had only heard of studying, I couldn\'t help envy birds. I always thought of something that could fly with superpowers, or the most powerful and helpful thing to me, and I always put travel or world tours on my bucket list. In this way, I always wanted to be a free person, a happy person. Birds can always fly, and when they\'re tired, they can go somewhere. Among them, the eagle is the most powerful and cool, so I want to become an eagle. Of course, it may be a scary place like eating each other, but wouldn\'t it be fun?
강사 첨삭
Hi Maria!
The eagle is a mighty bird that is so subtle. It doesn\'t act savage like the crocodile or lion and it looks peaceful waiting for its prey. When it moves, it is accurate and it doesn\'t need other birds to support it to be able to hunt. Unlike the other birds in the forest, the eagle stands alone and lives peacefully.
Be like the eagle and live a better life when you grow older.
Thank you! See you in class tomorrow.
-T. Donna =)
>> Eagle is a bird and it is the most powerful bird.
Since in the past, when I think of animals, I think of birds.
>> Correct!
As someone who had only heard of studying, I couldn\'t help envy birds.
>> Correct!
I always thought of something that could fly with superpowers, or the most powerful and helpful thing to me, and I always put travel or world tours on my bucket list.
>> Correct!
In this way, I always wanted to be a free person, a happy person.
>> Correct!
Birds can always fly, and when they\'re tired, they can go somewhere.
>> Correct!
Among them, the eagle is the most powerful and cool, so I want to become an eagle.
>> Correct!
Of course, it may be a scary place like eating each other, but wouldn\'t it be fun?
>> Correct!
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