I want to be strong and healthy
학생이 쓴 원문
The answer is, \"Of course!\". If I\'m healthy, I\'m very lucky boy and my father said \"There is anything that happier than healthy.\". I agree this opinion. If I\'m not healthy, then though if I\'m very good at English, or math, I won\'t be happy because I\'m not healthy. So health is very important thing but I think great power is not so important. I don\'t have to be too strong. I hope just being healthy.
P.S. Could I write my diary here? And, Could you edit my diary?
강사 첨삭
Hi, Daniel! Great job! You answered the question correctly. However, avoid using \"of course\" in writing. It\'s just usually spoken.
- Teacher Debbie
>> The answer is yes.
P.S. Could I write my diary here? And, Could you edit my diary?
If I\'m healthy, I\'m very lucky boy and my father said \"There is anything that happier than healthy.\".
>> If I\'m healthy, I will be a very lucky boy because my father said, \"There is nothing than makes people happier than being healthy.\"
I agree this opinion.
>> I agree with this opinion.
If I\'m not healthy, then though if I\'m very good at English, or math, I won\'t be happy because I\'m not healthy.
>> If I\'m good at English or math but unhealthy, I will not be happy because I\'m not healthy.
So health is very important thing but I think great power is not so important.
>> Therefore, health is a very important thing
I don\'t have to be too strong.
>> This is a good sentence.
I hope just being healthy.
>> I just hope to be healthy.
P.S. Could I write my diary here? And, Could you edit my diary?
>> P.S. Could I write diary entries here, and could you edit them?
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