I want to change....

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I want to change the period of spending an year budget.

>> Did you mean: I want to change the period of spending the year\'s budget.
I don\'t know why, but there are rule to spend all money in year.

>> Did you mean: I don\'t know why, but there are rules on how to spend money wisely in a year.
So there are lot\'s of wasting money in the end of year.

>> So there are a lot of money wasted at the end of the year.

It has limited time which is 1 year in using them

>> The time is limited in terms of using it.

>> OR: The time is limited which means we only have a year to use it.
For example, pedestrian road blocks are replaced in every year,

>> For example, pedestrian road blocks are replaced every year.

>> OR: For example, pedestrian blocks are changed every year,

even though these are not damaged or broken.

>> Correct! (Check: capitalize the first letter of your sentence.)
Budget is collected from civil, so it is very precious.

>> Did you mean: Budget is collected from the people, so it is precious.
But many government officer don\'t think it is important.

>> But many government officers don\'t think that it is important.

>> OR: But many government officials are not aware of the importance of the money.
In budget management, there is a common think, If some of budget is remain, It can be the problem of the department.

>>  Did you mean: In budget management, there is a common thinking, if one of the budgets will remain , it can be a problem of the department.

Because remaining means that the money was not considered thoroughly in planing step.

>> It is because the remaining money was not considered in planning.

>> OR: It is because the remaining money was not thoroughly considered in planning.

so it is inevitable to be blamed.

>> So it is inevitable who is to be blamed.
However When we clear all of budget, that is not a problem.

>> Did you mean: However, when the method of budgeting is clear, there will be no problem.

>> OR: However, when the liquidation of budget is clear, there will be no problem.
so many officers want to spend all money, even though they know it is wasting.

>> So many officers want to spend all of the money even though they now it is just wasting.

>> OR: So many officers want to spend all of the money even though they now that the money is wasted.

I want to change this problem.

>> Correct!

It should be changed to prolong budget using time.

>> Did you mean: It should be changed to prolong the budget.