I want to quit smoking.

2014-06-03 · 첨삭 강사 Naomi

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Giving advice. Give at least 5 advice. I want to quit smoking. What should I do? first you should think about why do i need smoking ? another you find different interesting insted of smoking. or you can eat a chocarate or a rolly pop when you want to it. If you can,t stand smoking you can use fake ciggarette. also you should say to your friends or relationpeople who you want to quit smoking . They will help you that your purpose to quit smoking.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!

Thank you for your advice, but actually it is not for me.

But I like your first advice....

I totally agree with you.^^

 

Thank you.

See you later [이름].^^

 

-T.Naomi^

 

Giving advice. Give at least 5 advice. I want to quit smoking. What should I do?
>>correct
first you should think about why do i need smoking ?
>>First, you should think about why do I need to smoke?

another you find different interesting insted of smoking.
or you can eat a chocarate or a rolly pop when you want to it.
>>Another one, you find different interesting activities instead of smoking or you can eat chocolate or a lolly pop when you want to do it.

If you can,t stand smoking you can use fake ciggarette.
>>If you can\'t stand smoking you can use fake cigarette.

also you should say to your friends or relationpeople who you want to quit smoking .

>>Also you should say to your friends or relatives to quit smoking .

They will help you that your purpose to quit smoking.

>>They will help you with your purpose to quit smoking.

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