I want to receive various kinds of rice cakes.

2025-07-02 · 첨삭 강사 Andrea

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My birthday is July 29th. It means that my birthday is coming soon. I want to receive various kinds of rice cakes. Nowadays, I enjoy eating rice cakes for desserts instead of bread. (Because bread is made of flour, I think it\'s not good for my skin.) I want to eat it every day, but unfortunately, I don\'t have enough money. So, if I receive it for present, I\'ll eat my favorite dessert, rice cake all day.

강사 첨삭

Hi Kara!^^

Advance happy birthday!

Hoping you\'ll receive the presents you wish for.

Andrea

My birthday is July 29th.

>> My birthday is on July 29th.

It means that my birthday is coming soon.

>> Correct

I want to receive various kinds of rice cakes.
>> Correct

Nowadays, I enjoy eating rice cakes for desserts instead of bread. (Because bread is made of flour, I think it\'s not good for my skin.)
>> Nowadays, I enjoy eating rice cakes for dessert instead of bread. (Because bread is made of flour, I think it\'s not good for my skin.)

I want to eat it every day, but unfortunately, I don\'t have enough money.
>> Correct

So, if I receive it for present, I\'ll eat my favorite dessert, rice cake all day.

>> So, if I receive it as a present, I\'ll eat my favorite dessert, rice cake, all day.

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