I want to study abroad

2021-08-27 · 첨삭 강사 Debbie

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I want to study abroad.(If it is cheap to live.) I think it\'s a great chance. I will take two reasons why it\'s a great chance. First, my English ability will improve. Because, in foreign country, I have to use English only.(I don\'t know about any foreign language, except English). Then my English ability will improve naturally. Second, I\'ll have a special experience. For example, I can experience the culture of other country. Then I\'ll have wider sight of understanding other culture.

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I want to study abroad.(If it is cheap to live.) 
>> If it is cheap, I want to study abroad. 

I think it\'s a great chance. 
>> This is a good sentence.

I will take two reasons why it\'s a great chance.
>> I will cite two reasons why it\'s a great chance. 

First, my English ability will improve. 
>> First, my English skills will improve.

Because, in foreign country, I have to use English only.(I don\'t know about any foreign language, except English). 
>> It is because I only have to use English when I\'m in a foreign country. I don\'t know any foreign language, except for English.

Then my English ability will improve naturally.
>> So my English skills will improve naturally.

Second, I\'ll have a special experience.
>> This is a good sentence.

 For example, I can experience the culture of other country.
>> For example, I can experience the culture of other countries.

 Then I\'ll have wider sight of understanding other culture.
>> Then I\'ll have a deeper understanding of other culture. 


Great job, Daniel! Keep on doing your homework to improve your writing skills. You\'re doing great!

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