I want to study Mars when I become a astronaut!
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I want to study Mars when I become a astronaut! Because if I study Mars, something very interesting will happen. First of all, Mars is called the second Earth, and there is a reason for that. There are traces of water flowing on Mars, and if so, of course there will be life. Perhaps this is why NASA scientists are sending so many astronauts, satellites and robots to Mars. There may be many more reasons, but these are the main ones. I have no intention of becoming an astronaut, but if I become an astronaut, I will surely help and become a great talent in the future.
P.S. The picture is a real picture of the traces of water flow, which was taken from Mars by an artificial satellite!
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Hi Maria!
I believe you have mentioned this early this year. Mars is a planet of great opportunities. As you know it, our planet is feverish and somewhat sick already. We might all need to vacate it someday if we do not take care of it today. So, Mars is a very good choice.
Thanks again for this answer. If I were an astronaut, I will go and explore the outer space with you!
-T. Donna =)
>> I want to study Mars when I become an astronaut!
Because if I study Mars, something very interesting will happen.
>> Correct!
First of all, Mars is called the second Earth, and there is a reason for that.
>> Correct!
There are traces of water flowing on Mars, and if so, of course there will be life.
>> Correct!
Perhaps this is why NASA scientists are sending so many astronauts, satellites and robots to Mars.
>> Correct!
Or: Perhaps this is why NASA scientists are sending so many astronauts, satellites, and robots to Mars.
There may be many more reasons, but these are the main ones.
>> Correct!
I have no intention of becoming an astronaut, but if I become an astronaut, I will surely help and become a great talent in the future.
>> Correct!
P.S. The picture is a real picture of the traces of water flow, which was taken from Mars by an artificial satellite!
P.S. The picture is a real picture of the traces of water flow, which was taken from Mars by an artificial satellite!
>> Correct!
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