I want to talk about this lighthouse

2011-08-06 · 첨삭 강사 Karla

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I read a book called lighthouse-keeper. The man lives near the sea and his mother lives with him too. One day the man(the lighthouse-keeper) get married with a girl. After they married , the man's mom didn`t eat lunch or breafast. So the man tried to make his mother eat some food, but she didn`t. The other day, There was a lot of snow. the lighthouse-keeper went to the lighthouse. as he triped, he was buried in the snow. his mother saw him and tried to rescue him. When the firefighter came there, he was alive but his mother died. It was a little sad story

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HI, [이름]... Yes, I think the story is a bit tragic. You can tell me more about it on Monday. Anyway, with regards to my corrections, please be careful with the capitalization of words. Have a nice weekend.   I read a book called lighthouse-keeper. >>I read a book called "The Lighthouse Keeper". The man lives near the sea and his mother lives with him too. >>CORRECT^^ >>There was a man who lived with his mother near the sea. -->> BETTER One day the man(the lighthouse-keeper) get married with a girl. >>One day, the man (the lighthouse keeper) got married with a girl. After they married , the man's mom didn`t eat lunch or breafast. >>After they got married, the man's mom didn't eat lunch or breakfast. So the man tried to make his mother eat some food, but she didn`t. >>CORRECT^^The other day, There was a lot of snow. >>The other day, there was a lot of snow. the lighthouse-keeper went to the lighthouse. >>The lighthouse keeper went to the lighthouse. as he triped, he was buried in the snow. >>As he tripped, he got buried in the snow. his mother saw him and tried to rescue him. >>His mother saw him and tried to rescue him. When the firefighter came there, he was alive but his mother died. >>CORRECT^^ >>When the firefighters came, he was alive but his mother was dead. -->> BETTER It was a little sad story >>CORRECT^^

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