I want to travel if I have a lot of money.
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If I have a lot of money, I want to go to Finland. It is very expensive to go, so I will travel when I have lots of money. It will be good memories for me, and my families. Why it is Finland? First reason is I love snow and frozen lakes. Second, I can feel nature and aurora with my families. It will be good for family relationship.
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>> If I had a lot of money, I would want to go to Finland.
It is very expensive to go, so I will travel when I have lots of money.
>> It is very expensive to go there, so I would travel there if I had lots of money.
It will be good memories for me, and my families.
>> It would bring good memories to me and my family.
Why it is Finland?
>> Why would I like to go to Finland?
First reason is I love snow and frozen lakes.
>> The first reason is I love snow and frozen lakes.
Second, I can feel nature and aurora with my families.
>> Second, I could see the natural wonders in Finland like the aurora with my family.
It will be good for family relationship.
>> The trip would be good to strengthen family relationship.
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