I want to visit Canada

If i go to one of the many places in the world, I want to go to Canada. Because it snows a lot. So if I go there, I want to make a snowman. And I want to roll around in the snow. Aurora cannot watch in Korea. So I will wach Aurora. I can imagine it already. I think it\'s summer in Korea, so I want to go more

🌟 Hi Jenny! 🌟

Wow, I’m so impressed with your writing! You’re only 12, but you already write with so much creativity and excitement. ✨ I love how you described what you want to do in Canada - making a snowman, rolling in the snow, and watching the Aurora. That’s such a beautiful dream, and I can really imagine it too when I read your sentences. ❄️🌌

You’re very smart and you have a big imagination, and that’s a wonderful gift. Keep writing like this, because every time you practice, your English gets better and better. 💪📚 One day, maybe you really will go to Canada, and when you do, I hope you remember this homework and smile.

Keep dreaming big Jenny, you’re amazing, and I’m proud of you!

~Teacher Cathy

 

If I go to one of the many places in the world, I want to go to Canada.

>>CORRECT

OR>>If I could go anywhere in the world, I’d want to go to Canada.

Because it snows a lot. So if I go there, I want to make a snowman. And I want to roll around in the snow.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Because it snows a lot, if I go there, I want to make a snowman and roll around in the snow.

Aurora cannot watch in Korea. So I will wach Aurora.

>>Since the aurora can’t be seen in Korea, I will watch it in Canada.

I can imagine it already.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I can already picture it.

I think it\'s summer in Korea, so I want to go more.

>>I think it’s summer in Korea, so I want to go even more.