I was born and raised...
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I was born and raised in home where both parents are working.
Both of parents are teacher, so they couldn't use their vacation when they want.
I asked to my parents that If they didn't have any inconvenience or problem while they are caring me and my elder sister.
They agreed that they hesitated that they maintain their "both-working-sysyem".
becase ther was no one who could care us.
So they had a contract with housekeeper.
When I was young, It is the stress that I couldn't be with my parents in daytime.
Even I cried when my mother comute to her school. At that time the fact that she had to go work is very stressful for me but as I grew up, It was no matter for me.
As time goes by, I realized this kind of experience make me more indepandant.
However, I want to be a father who care my childran with love and spend much time with my chidran
강사 첨삭
Hi there [이름]!
In the situation you mentioned below, I do understand what you went through.
I also had the same feeling when I was young.
But the good thing is that we were able to be independent, right?
Every experience we had when we were young taught us something.
We should be grateful for everything that we have.
So, I want to thank you for being my student and I hope that you won\'t get tired of learning English.
Teacher Nina
>> I was born and raised in a house where both parents are working.
Both of parents are teacher, so they couldn\'t use their vacation when they want.
Both of parents are teacher, so they couldn\'t use their vacation when they want.
>> Both of my parents are teachers, so they could\'n\'t get a vacation whenever they want to.
I asked to my parents that If they didn\'t have any inconvenience or problem while they are caring me and my elder sister.
I asked to my parents that If they didn\'t have any inconvenience or problem while they are caring me and my elder sister.
>> I asked my parents if they didn\'t have a problem while taking good care of me and my elder sister.
They agreed that they hesitated that they maintain their \"both-working-sysyem\".
They agreed that they hesitated that they maintain their \"both-working-sysyem\".
>> Did you mean: They said that they hesitated that both of them will continue working.
becase ther was no one who could care us.
becase ther was no one who could care us.
>> Because no one can take good care of us.
So they had a contract with housekeeper.
>> So they hired a housekeeper.
When I was young, It is the stress that I couldn\'t be with my parents in daytime.
When I was young, It is the stress that I couldn\'t be with my parents in daytime.
>> When I was young, I felt depressed because I couldn\'t be with my parents during the day.
>> OR: When I was young, I felt sad because I couldn\'t be with my parents during the day.
Even I cried when my mother comute to her school.
Even I cried when my mother comute to her school.
>> I even cried when my mother went to her school.
>> OR: I even cried when my mother leave for work.
At that time the fact that she had to go work is very stressful for me but as I grew up, It was no matter for me.
>> At that time, the fact that she had to go to work was very stressful for me. But as I grew up, it didn\'t matter anymore.
>> OR: At that time, the fact that she had to go to work was very stressful for me. But as I grew older, I got used to it.
As time goes by, I realized this kind of experience make me more indepandant.
>> As time passed, I realized that this kind of experience made me more independent.
However, I want to be a father who care my childran with love and spend much time with my chidran
As time goes by, I realized this kind of experience make me more indepandant.
>> As time passed, I realized that this kind of experience made me more independent.
However, I want to be a father who care my childran with love and spend much time with my chidran
>> However, I want to be a father who will take good care of his children and spend a lot of time with them.
>> OR: However, I want to be a loving father who will take good care and spend a lot of time with his kids.
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