I welcome to your comeback hh.

2010-02-09 · 첨삭 강사 Shy

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Hi, Shy! I welcome to your comeback hh. All education give the challenge and boring to students. The power of electricity is great. In winter, it makes everything to be warm. Subway, bus and room are to be warm because of the electricity. It operates the heater and the airconditioner. In Korea, no oil produced. Then, in winter the government emphasize the energy saving. Using heater is limited in the public building. In summer, the same situation is become because of the airconditioner. Is the oil produced in Philippines? If no oil, you must save energy. Because the oil for energy is very expensive.

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Hello [이름]!!   Thank you so much! I am happy to be back!^^ I agree with your composition here, we must always conserve energy especially oil and electricity because these energy sources are too expensive. Here in the Philippines, we also have oil deposits but it뭩 not enough to supply our whole country뭩 needs so we import oil from other countries like Saudi Arabia. See you in class!!   T. Shy   I welcome to your comeback hh.>> I welcome you back hh. All education give the challenge and boring to students. >> All education process gives either challenge or boredom to students. In winter, it makes everything to be warm.>> In winter, it makes everything warm. Subway, bus and room are to be warm because of the electricity.>> Subways, buses and rooms warm because of the electricity. It operates the heater and the airconditioner.>> It operates the heater and the air conditioner. In Korea, no oil produced.>> In Korea, no oil is produced.Then, in winter the government emphasize the energy saving.>> Then in winter, the government emphasizes energy saving. Using heater is limited in the public building.>> Using heater is limited in public buildings.In summer, the same situation is become because of the airconditioner.>> In summer, the same situation happens because of the air conditioner. Is the oil produced in Philippines?>> Is oil produced in Philippines?If no oil, you must save energy. >> If there뭩 no oil, you must save energy.

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