I went on a church retreat
학생이 쓴 원문
I went on a church retreat during Jenuary 13th~16th.
There were many other church people, so I should become intimate.
It was very hard, but I am happy to make friends.
I listened a lot of text and lecture.
I sheded tears of repentance and I decided that I will live for god's glory.
Also I will study harder than now for god's glory.
강사 첨삭
Hi there, [이름]!
Thank you for your composition! You musta have had so much fun in the church retreat. Tell me more about it in class, okay? Take care and talk to you later!
T. JanE ^^
I went on a church retreat during Jenuary 13th~16th.>> I went on a church retreat from January 13 to 16.
There were many other church people, so I should become intimate.>> There were many people from the church that I should be intimate with.
It was very hard, but I am happy to make friends.>> It was very hard, but I was happy to make new friends.
I listened a lot of text and lecture.>> I listened to a lot of lectures.
I sheded tears of repentance and I decided that I will live for god\'s glory.>> I shed tears of repentance and I decided to live for God\'s glory.
Also I will study harder than now for god\'s glory.
>> I will also harder than before for God\'s glory.
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