I will advise them to stop smoking.
학생이 쓴 원문
I will advise them to stop smoking. Even though I have never smoked. I know It is so difficult for someone to stop smoking. So, if someone quits smoking, we think he is a great person. Nevertheless, I know some people that quit smoking. So, if he decides to do it strongly and family helps them. He can do it. But if they would smoke. I would tell them not to hurt anyone.
Anyway, not learning to smoke is easier than quitting. I have two sons. One is a high school student and the other is a college student. Usually I repeatly tell them not to learn to smoke. I think prior education is the best.
강사 첨삭
Hi Elliot!
As I said, good advice! It is still important for kids to learn on their own. We can educate them well so that they will make proper choices. Parents who are strict with their children without educating them to make children more curious so they tend to try the vice more. I do hope more children get educated.
For today\'s homework, great sentences! Again, there are sentences best merged into one. Also, very important: please avoid starting your sentences with \'and\', \'so\', \'but\' and \'because\'. These might be normal when speaking, but not advisable when writing.
Keep it up, Elliot! I love your thoughts and your essays have great substance.
Have a nice weekend!
-Teacher Violet
>> CORRECT!
Even though I have never smoked. I know It is so difficult for someone to stop smoking.
>> Even though I have never smoked, I know It is so difficult for someone to stop smoking.
So, if someone quits smoking, we think he is a great person.
>> That\'s why if someone quits smoking, we think of him as a great person.
Nevertheless, I know some people that quit smoking.
>> Nevertheless, I know some people who quit smoking.
So, if he decides to do it strongly and family helps them. He can do it.
>> So, if he strongly decides to do it and his family helps them, he can do it.
But if they would smoke. I would tell them not to hurt anyone.
>> If they smoke, I would tell them not to hurt anyone.
Anyway, not learning to smoke is easier than quitting.
>> CORRECT!
I have two sons.
>> CORRECT!
One is a high school student and the other is a college student.
>> CORRECT!
Usually I repeatly tell them not to learn to smoke.
>> I repeatedly tell them not to learn to smoke.
I think prior education is the best.
>> CORRECT!
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