I will make more coll paper-build robot!!

2021-10-04 · 첨삭 강사 Vance

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Hello! Today is Monday but yesterday is Korean holiday- National Foundation Day. (usually Korean National Foundation Day is 10/3 but 10/3 is Sunday.. Therefore Korean Government Announced \"10/3 is sunday, therefore we will specify substitute public holidays on the 4th of october.\" I thought \'Wow, It is great!!\' okay. 10/4, I made paper-build. What is paper-build? It is new method of origami. What is new method? 1.paper-build Use only A4&glue stick. (I will show image.) 2.paper-build use special block(made A4)&ponytail paper. Today I made new robot \'Build X-mini\' I don\'t made well. But I felt It\'s make me happy. I will make more cool paper-build robot!!! @@::: I insert two picture. shabby robot picture is mine. very cool robot picture is master\'s work.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for doing your homework. ^^

Today is Monday but yesterday is Korean holiday-
>>Today is Monday but yesterday is a Korean holiday-

Therefore Korean Government
Announced \"10/3 is sunday, therefore we will specify
substitute public holidays on the 4th of october.\"
>>Therefore the Korean Government announced on 10/3 Sunday specified that it\'s the 
substitute public holiday for the 4th of October.\"


I made paper-build.
>>> I built a paper robot. 

 It is new method of origami.
>>> It is a new method of origami.

(I will show image.)
>>(I will show an image.)

Today I made new robot \'Build X-mini\'
>>Today I made a new robot \'Build X-mini\'

I don\'t made well. But I felt It\'s make me happy.
>>It\'s not well done. But I feel happy making it. 

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