I will not do these things..
학생이 쓴 원문
In these days, there are many parents who do wrong things as a parents.
I don't know why but,, I'm certain that each of them has some problems.
I heard some news in these days which is about raising their kids.
the couple married recently have a baby. but they don't care him.
Since they were met at cyber game, what all they do is going internet cafe and play their games.
So the 5-year-old kid have to fast his meal.
Of course, He ask them to do their home, but they didn't care.
they didn't feel any responsibility about their kid.
and..recently I was shocked by stranger who was shopping in a market with her kid.
It is the fact that many childran ask their parents to buy what they want Unless they would cry.
I know that, she have kid stop crying. but she insult the kid with bad language.
I will not do these things which can be the scar of the kids.
강사 첨삭
Oh my god! I was shocked because of what you mentioned below.
I do understand you. These kind of situations happen in every country.
Maybe the parents should undergo a counseling to be knowledgeable about their responsibilities.
If this problem can\'t be solved, the kids will have a difficult time everyday that will affect their personality.
Thanks for sharing your ideas about this topic.
Talk to you next week. Take Care!
Teacher Nina
Teacher Nina
>> In these days, there are many parents who commit mistakes in terms of parenting.
>> OR: These days, there are many parents who do something wrong in terms of parenting.
I don\'t know why but,, I\'m certain that each of them has some problems.
I don\'t know why but,, I\'m certain that each of them has some problems.
>> Correct
>> OR: I don\'t know why but I am certain that each one of them has a problem.
I heard some news in these days which is about raising their kids.
>> I heard it on the news these days and it is about raising kids.
the couple married recently have a baby. but they don\'t care him.
the couple married recently have a baby. but they don\'t care him.
>> The couple recently got married and had a baby. but they don\'t care about him/her.
Since they were met at cyber game, what all they do is going internet cafe and play their games.
Since they were met at cyber game, what all they do is going internet cafe and play their games.
>> Since they met at a cyber game, what they do is to go to an internet cafe and play games.
>> OR: Since they met in an online game, they usually go to an internet cafe and play their game.
So the 5-year-old kid have to fast his meal.
So the 5-year-old kid have to fast his meal.
>> So, the five year old kid has to skip a meal.
Of course, He ask them to do their home, but they didn\'t care.
Of course, He ask them to do their home, but they didn\'t care.
>> Of course, he asked them to go home but they didn\'t mind him.
they didn\'t feel any responsibility about their kid.
they didn\'t feel any responsibility about their kid.
>> They are not responsible parents.
>> OR: They can\'t handle their responsibilities as parents.
and..recently I was shocked by stranger who was shopping in a market with her kid.
>> OR: They can\'t handle their responsibilities as parents.
and..recently I was shocked by stranger who was shopping in a market with her kid.
>> And recently, I was shocked because of a stranger who was shopping in a market with her kid.
It is the fact that many childran ask their parents to buy what they want Unless they would cry.
>> It is a fact that many children ask their parents to buy what they want, otherwise they will cry.
I know that, she have kid stop crying. but she insult the kid with bad language.
I know that, she have kid stop crying. but she insult the kid with bad language.
>> I know that she has to make the kid stop crying. But instead, she insulted the kid by saying a bad language.
I will not do these things which can be the scar of the kids.
I will not do these things which can be the scar of the kids.
>> I will not do these things which can hurt kids.
>> OR: I won\'t do these things which can affect the personality of the child.
>> OR: I won\'t do these things which can affect the personality of the child.
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