I would appreciate it if you could check the sentence below.
학생이 쓴 원문
Anyone who seeks heaven from outside not inside you is a person who runs after a dream and cannot attain the kingdom of heaven forever.
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You\'ve made a great complex sentence. Keep it up!
You\'ve made a great complex sentence. Keep it up!
- T. Rina
1. Anyone who seeks heaven from outside not inside you is a person who runs after a dream and cannot attain the kingdom of heaven forever.
>> Anyone who seeks heaven from the outside and not inside you is a person who runs after a dream and cannot attain the kingdom of heaven forever.
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