I would not spend more time with my computer.
학생이 쓴 원문
I don\'t want to spend more time with my computer.
There are two reasons.
First, when I looking at the computer\'s screen, it feels dizzy.
It\'s because, it is bigger than the smartphone\'s screen.
Second, I spend a lot of time with my smartphone.
I don\'t want to spend more time to use others anymore.
In conclusion, I would not spend more time with my computer.
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I don\'t want to spend more time with my computer.
>> Correct
There are two reasons.
There are two reasons.
>> Correct
First, when I looking at the computer\'s screen, it feels dizzy.
First, when I looking at the computer\'s screen, it feels dizzy.
>> First, when I look at the computer\'s screen, it makes me feel dizzy.
It\'s because, it is bigger than the smartphone\'s screen.
It\'s because, it is bigger than the smartphone\'s screen.
>> It\'s because it is bigger than a smartphone\'s screen.
Second, I spend a lot of time with my smartphone.
Second, I spend a lot of time with my smartphone.
>> Correct
I don\'t want to spend more time to use others anymore.
I don\'t want to spend more time to use others anymore.
>> Correct
In conclusion, I would not spend more time with my computer.
In conclusion, I would not spend more time with my computer.
>> Correct
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