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2020-06-03 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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The most recent show I saw the Super Wings musical last summer. In fact, Super Wings is an animation of various airplanes that children like. My children usually enjoy this animation, so I watched this musical with them. The musical theme this time was that the Super Wings planes defended the universe. Protecting the earth from falling meteorites and living happily. There was a somewhat loose content for adults like me, but the kids were very fond of it. I was satisfied with the characters taking pictures with the children and saying it was a really fun performance.

강사 첨삭

Hello Miss. [Name] . Thank you once again for this. I guess as a mother, most of the things you do are more likely for your children. What makes them happy would make you happy too.

- T. Beth
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The most recent show I saw the Super Wings musical last summer.

>>> The most recent show I saw was the Super Wings musical last summer.

In fact, Super Wings is an animation of various airplanes that children like.

>>> correct
My children usually enjoy this animation, so I watched this musical with them.

>>> correct
The musical theme this time was that the Super Wings planes defended the universe.

>>> correct
Protecting the earth from falling meteorites and living happily.

>>> correct
There was a somewhat loose content for adults like me, but the kids were very fond of it.

>>> OR: It somewhat had a loose content for adults like me, but the kids were very fond of it.

I was satisfied with the characters taking pictures with the children and saying it was a really fun performance.

>>> correct

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