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Tell me something about your neighbors I have a funny story between Stefan and me. First time we misunderstood each other as foreigner. because my appearance looks like Southeast Asia people. and he also has abnormal appearance. After comforming both us are Korean. We became close and I have another close neighbor. His name is Randy who came from Philippine. We are members of the church band. He can play drum very well. so we've been playing musical instrument in the church every Sunday. How many neighbors do you know? I have a lot of neighbors and I know most of them because all my church friends are my neighbors Neighbors should not be for acquanintances level only because we can make friends with them when we really need something and we are get in trouble We could relay on them and ask them to give me advice.

A pleasant morning again Mr. [Name]!

Actually, I was again laughing when I read your composition.

Since you mentioned that you and your friend look different and both of you don\'t look like Koreans.

That\'s very funny.

Anyway, please review the corrections I have written below. 

Thank you!

Always,

Kathrine ^^

Tell me something about your neighbors

I have a funny story between Stefan and me.

>> CORRECT

First time we misunderstood each other as foreigner.

>> The first time we met, we misunderstood that we are foreigners.

because my appearance looks like Southeast Asia people.

>> Because my appearance looks like a Southeast Asian. 

and he also has abnormal appearance.

>> And he also has a different appearance. 

 After comforming both us are Korean. We became close  

>> After confirming that both of us are Koreans, we became close. 

and I have another close neighbor.

>> And I have another close neighbor. 

His name is Randy who came from Philippine.

>> His name is Randy who came from Philippines.

>> OR: He is Randy who is from Philippines. 

We are members of the church band.

>> CORRECT

He can play drum very well.

>> CORRECT

so we\'ve been playing musical instrument in the church every Sunday.

>> CORRECT

>> OR: So we are playing musical instruments in the church every Sunday. 

How many neighbors do you know?

I have a lot of neighbors and I know most of them

>> CORRECT

because all my church friends are my neighbors
>> CORRECT (***capitalization)

Neighbors should not be for acquanintances level only

>> CORRECT (***spelling-acquaintances)

 because we can make friends with them  when we really need something and we are get in trouble   We could relay on them and ask them to give me advice.

>> Because when we make friends with them and when we are really in need of something or we are in trouble, we can rely on them and they can give us some pieces of advice.