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What programs on TV do you usually watch? My favorite program is the evening news program. Through it. I learn a lot about what is going on in my country. Aside from knowing about local news, I also get updated on the latest events around the world. When do you watch it? I usually watch it every night. My favorite time is 9 p.m news. Why do you like watching it? Because it informs me of every event that's happening in my country. Moreover, I can improve my policy opinions. Do you think TV programs have advantages or disadvantages for children? I think it has both of them. If we use TV wisely, we can use TV good way to teach our children. TV has also disadvantages though. The disadvantage of TV is that it provides opportunities for children to be exposed to more inappropriate programs. I'm afraid that children imitate their bad actions such as smoking, violence, drug, sexrul action

Hi there again Mr. [Name]! Here are my comments. Hope it will help.  ^^   With regards to your composition on the first question below, you should be aware when you are using punctuation marks. Do not add unnecessary punctuation marks on your sentence whcih will make it as a phrase as had no meaning. Though we are correcting your speaking skills, we are also correcting your writing ability. These two hand in hand.   And in the remaining questions, be more aware of the proper word or vocabulary to be used in your sentence. This will make a great impact in your composition.   Thanks again! ^^   Always,Kathrine ^^     What programs on TV do you usually watch? My favorite program is the evening news program. >> CORRECT Through it. I learn a lot about what is going on in my country. >> Through it, I learn a lot about what is going on in my country. (**proper use of punctuation mark) >> OR:  I am learning a lot of news about what is going on in my country through it.  Aside from knowing about local news, I also get updated on the latest events around the world.>> Aside from knowing about the local news, I can alos be updated about the latest events around the world.   When do you watch it?I usually watch it every night. >> CORRECTMy favorite time is 9 p.m news. >> CORRECT   Why do you like watching it? Because it informs me of every event that\'s happening in my country. >> CORRECT Moreover, I can improve my policy opinions. >> Moreover, I can improve my political views/opinions.   Do you think TV programs have advantages or disadvantages for children? I think it has both of them. >> CORRECT  If we use TV wisely, we can use TV good way to teach our children.>> If we use TV wisely, we can use it in a  good way to teach our children. TV has also disadvantages though. >> CORRECT The disadvantage of TV is that it provides opportunities for children to be exposed to more inappropriate programs.>> CORRECTI\'m afraid that children imitate their bad actions such as smoking, violence, drug, sexrul action >> I\'m afraid that the children will imitate the bad actions viewed in the TV such as smoking, violence, drugs and sexual acts.