IELTS answer

2013-09-12 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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What are some ways the Internet can be used for education? I believe that the education using the internet is a innovative measures to reduce huge gap between rich and poor people. As you know. It looks like impossible to over come social ladder. Poor children don't have a chance to receive good quality education. It cause a vicious circle. and we have to brake that circle. I think the education using the internet is a very good way to provide equal opportunity. What are you studying now? Well, Today I am not student. I am an engineer. I studied Music when I was university student. But now, I am enjoying music as my favorite hobby now. I never regret choice of my major. And I think that human need to study during our life. If we don't keep study, we could fall behind.

강사 첨삭

One last time, good morning again Mr. [Name].! ^^

As they say, education is the greatest  inheritance a person will have. 

So education will really give an equal opportunity to all. 

And also, it would also break the the social circle. 

Anyway, see you tomorrow!

Have a great day and take care! 


Always, 
Kathrine ^^


What are some ways the Internet can be used for education?


I believe that the education using the internet is a innovative measures to reduce huge gap between rich and poor people.

>> I believe that education using the internet is an innovative measure to reduce the huge gap between the rich and the poor. 

As you know. It looks like impossible to over come social ladder.

>> As you know, it looks like it\'s impossible to overcome the social ladder. 

Poor children don\'t have a chance to receive good quality education.

>> correct!

It cause a vicious circle. and we have to brake that circle.

>> It cause a vicious circle and we have to break the circle. 

I think the education using the internet is a very good way to provide equal opportunity.

>> I think that education using the internet is a very good way to provide equal opportunity to all. 


What are you studying now?


Well, Today I am not student. I am an engineer.

>> Well, today, I am not a student. I am an engineer., 

I studied Music when I was university student.

>> I studied Music when I was a university student. 

But now, I am enjoying music as my favorite hobby now.

>>  correct!

I never regret choice of my major.

>> I never regret choosing my major. 

And I think that human need to study during our life.

>> And I think that human needs to study  during our life. 

If we don\'t keep study, we could fall behind.

>> If we don\'t keep on studying, we could fall behind. 

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