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Describe a typical Spring Festival for a Korean family.
In Korea, May is the month of family. There are Children's Day and Parent's Day in May. When Children's Day is just around the corner, Many child begin to want their parent to give presents to them.On Parent's Day, most sons and daughters give their parent carnations that indicate love and respect to their parent.
On the other hand, in May many amusement parks such as Everland have busy days because many family visit there. May is the most beautiful weather in a year and good for outdoor activity. So during that season, many family enjoy picnic.
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Hi there, what a very nice composition...
thank you so much for sharing some of the details about your country's Parent's day and Children's Day.
Ill talk to you again later...
T.Lei
In Korea, May is the month of family. >>correct!
>>In Korea, may is family Month.
There are Children's Day and Parent's Day in May.
>>correct!
When Children's Day is just around the corner, Many child begin to want their parent to give presents to them.
>>When Children's Day is just around the corner, many kids begin to ask presents from their parents.
On Parent's Day, most sons and daughters give their parent carnations that indicate love and respect to their parent.
>>On Parent's day, most sons and daughters give their parents a flower called carnation as a sign of love and respect.
On the other hand, in May many amusement parks such as Everland have busy days because many family visit there.
On the other hand, in May many amusement parks such as Everland have busy days because many family visit there.
>>On the other hand, in May many amusement parks such as Everland have busy days because many families try to visit those places.
May is the most beautiful weather in a year and good for outdoor activity.
>>May has the most beautiful weather of the year, for it is good to stay outdoors.
So during that season, many family enjoy picnic.
>>So during that season, many families enjoy having picnic.
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