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학생이 쓴 원문
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am one of the person who lives in King street, Since I have moved on this summer.
I writing to complain that the rubbish collection machine in my town is not working at this moment.
First of all, I would like to explain how the garbage collection machine is not working.
When I put my rubbish in the machine, It is not closed, noisy sounding.
So I had been not able to throw away my rubbish since collection machine was broken.
Currently, My neighbours who used this machine can not throw away their rubbish
Moreover, Some people who could not throw away their rubbish start to stack the garbage next to the machine !
So we are suffered from terrible smells.
Therefore, I would be grateful If you fix this machine and clean up stacked rubbish as soon as possible.
Also, I suggest that appoint who check the machine on regular basis.
If you have any further question, please don\'t hesitate to contact me at e-mail [이메일]
respectfully,
Ki[이름] [이름].
강사 첨삭
Good evening [이름]!
You have a powerful and well explained body of the letter here. It is very clear and specific.
Always remember to capitalize your first letters of sentences and refrain from using a lot of commas when not needed.
Excellent letter, keep it up!
-T. Donna =)
>> Correct!
I am one of the person who lives in King street, Since I have moved on this summer.
I writing to complain that the rubbish collection machine in my town is not working at this moment.
>> I am one of the persons who live in King Street, since I have moved this summer.
I am writing to complain about the rubbish collection machine in my town which is not working at this moment.First of all, I would like to explain how the garbage collection machine is not working.
When I put my rubbish in the machine, It is not closed, noisy sounding.
So I had been not able to throw away my rubbish since collection machine was broken.
>> ...When I put my rubbish in the machine, It does not close and it makes a noisy sound.
So I had not been able to throw away my rubbish since the collection machine was broken.
Currently, My neighbours who used this machine can not throw away their rubbish
Moreover, Some people who could not throw away their rubbish start to stack the garbage next to the machine !
So we are suffered from terrible smells.
So I had not been able to throw away my rubbish since the collection machine was broken.
Currently, My neighbours who used this machine can not throw away their rubbish
Moreover, Some people who could not throw away their rubbish start to stack the garbage next to the machine !
So we are suffered from terrible smells.
>> Currently, my neighbours who used this machine can not throw away their rubbish as well.
Moreover, Some people who could not throw away their rubbish start to stack the garbage next to the machine
so we are suffering from the terrible smell.
Therefore, I would be grateful If you fix this machine and clean up stacked rubbish as soon as possible.
Also, I suggest that appoint who check the machine on regular basis.
Moreover, Some people who could not throw away their rubbish start to stack the garbage next to the machine
so we are suffering from the terrible smell.
Therefore, I would be grateful If you fix this machine and clean up stacked rubbish as soon as possible.
Also, I suggest that appoint who check the machine on regular basis.
>> Therefore, I would be grateful If you fix this machine and clean up the stacked rubbish as soon as possible.
Also, I suggest to appoint a person who will check the machine on regular basis.
If you have any further question, please don\'t hesitate to contact me at e-mail [이메일]
Also, I suggest to appoint a person who will check the machine on regular basis.
If you have any further question, please don\'t hesitate to contact me at e-mail [이메일]
>> If you have any further question, please don\'t hesitate to contact me at e-mail address [이메일].
respectfully,
respectfully,
>> Respectfully,
Ki[이름] [이름].
Ki[이름] [이름].
>> Ki[이름] [이름]
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