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Dear Sir/Madam,
I am a person who has lived in this city for 10years.
I’m writing to give you feedback you requested that either to sponsor sport team or to pay for two concerts.
There are many benefits, even if you choose just one.
First of all, If the company sponsor a children\'s sport team, It can help for children who live in our city to increase their physical growth.
On the other hand, If the company contribute money to pay for the concerts, It also have a lot of benefits. For instance, Being increased a tourist can lead to develop of community economy.
Actually, I would like to suggest that the company sponsor a sports team for just one year, pay for just one concert equally. it will be a chance to get a local children’s growth and develop of local economy.
If you have any further question, please don’t hesitate to call me at [계좌번호]
Respectfully,
Ki[이름] [이름].
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! It\'s a new week once again.
You have fulfilled the task on the letter and decided judiciously on what to do with the funds. Thank you for crafting a very good letter!
See you in class later!
-T. Donna =)
>> Correct!
I am a person who has lived in this city for 10years.
I’m writing to give you feedback you requested that either to sponsor sport team or to pay for two concerts.
I am a person who has lived in this city for 10years.
I’m writing to give you feedback you requested that either to sponsor sport team or to pay for two concerts.
>> I am a person who has lived in this city for 10 years. (Correct!)
I’m writing to give you a feedback on your request to either to sponsor a sports team or to pay for two concerts.
There are many benefits, even if you choose just one.
First of all, If the company sponsor a children\'s sport team, It can help for children who live in our city to increase their physical growth.
On the other hand, If the company contribute money to pay for the concerts, It also have a lot of benefits. For instance, Being increased a tourist can lead to develop of community economy.
I’m writing to give you a feedback on your request to either to sponsor a sports team or to pay for two concerts.
There are many benefits, even if you choose just one.
First of all, If the company sponsor a children\'s sport team, It can help for children who live in our city to increase their physical growth.
On the other hand, If the company contribute money to pay for the concerts, It also have a lot of benefits. For instance, Being increased a tourist can lead to develop of community economy.
>> There are many benefits, even if you choose just one. (Correct!)
First of all, if the company sponsors a children\'s sports team, it can help children who are living in our city to increase their physical growth.
On the other hand, if the company contributes money to pay for the concerts, it also has a lot of benefits. For instance, it will increase the number of tourists that can lead to the development of the community\'s economy.
Actually, I would like to suggest that the company sponsor a sports team for just one year, pay for just one concert equally. it will be a chance to get a local children’s growth and develop of local economy.
First of all, if the company sponsors a children\'s sports team, it can help children who are living in our city to increase their physical growth.
On the other hand, if the company contributes money to pay for the concerts, it also has a lot of benefits. For instance, it will increase the number of tourists that can lead to the development of the community\'s economy.
Actually, I would like to suggest that the company sponsor a sports team for just one year, pay for just one concert equally. it will be a chance to get a local children’s growth and develop of local economy.
>> Actually, I would like to suggest that the company will sponsor a sports team for just one year and pay for just one concert equally. It will be a chance to get a local children’s growth and develop local economy.
If you have any further question, please don’t hesitate to call me at [계좌번호]
If you have any further question, please don’t hesitate to call me at [계좌번호]
>> Correct! (Place period at the end of the sentence.)
Respectfully,
Respectfully,
>> Correct!
Ki[이름] [이름].
Ki[이름] [이름].
>> No period at the end of your name.
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