<IELTS task 1> - say what the participants liked about the hotel - Explain why they were unhappy abo
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Could you make sure that this situation will not happen again? Furthermore, I suggest that you should do double check before serving foods and train your staff again. I hope that the food will improve.
I look forward to hearing from you soon.
task2: Many working people get little or no exercise during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result.Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?
Nowadays, a lot of workers do not exercise hardly or just or a short time during the working day even in their leisure time. In account of this situation, many people could have health problems later on. For a variety of reasons for this, but I believe that we can find out some solutions to solve it.
First of all, employees are too busy and work much time and take less holiday. Therefore, workers do not have any energy after their work even they do not have enough time to sleep properly.
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Could you make sure that this situation will not happen again? Furthermore, I suggest that you should do double check before serving foods and train your staff again. I hope that the food will improve.
>>Correct!
Nowadays, a lot of workers do not exercise hardly or just or a short time during the working day even in their leisure time.
>>Nowadays, a lot of workers do not exercise hardly or just for a short time during the working day even in their leisure time.
In account of this situation, many people could have health problems later on. For a variety of reasons for this, but I believe that we can find out some solutions to solve it.
>>In account of this situation, many people could have health problems later on. But, I believe that we can find out some solutions to solve it.
First of all, employees are too busy and work much time and take less holiday. Therefore, workers do not have any energy after their work even they do not have enough time to sleep properly.
>>First of all, employees are too busy and work much time and take less holiday. Therefore, workers do not have any energy after their work, and they even do not have enough time to sleep properly.
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