ielts task1: - say what the participants liked about the hotel - Explain why they were unhappy about
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I am [이름] Choi and work for ABD company as a marketing manager. I hired 103 meeting room in your hotel during the day time on the 15th of September. I am writing to express my disappointment with your hotel service especially in terms of the foodLet me explain my situation in more detail, the meeting room itself was great. There were equipped everything we needed during the meeting. Also, the room was quiet enough to have a conference and tidy.While we were happy with the facility, the food that was served for lunch was terrible. The omelet wasn’t cooked properly and the sliced mangos were too frozen to eat. So, we hardly ate our lunch. In other words, we couldn’t enjoy the food at all. After the lunch time, I asked one of your staff to explain this situation. The staff said that they missed our lunch order so they did not have time to prepare it.As you know, I have used your hotel for about two years and the meeting have been organized biweekly in your hotel. Could you make sure....
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Hi Ms. [이름]!
Here are my corrections.
I am [이름] Choi and work for ABD company as a marketing manager. I hired 103 meeting room in your hotel during the day time on the 15th of September.
>>I am [이름] Choi and work for ABD company as a marketing manager. I hired 103 meeting rooms in your hotel during the daytime on the 15th of September.
I am writing to express my disappointment with your hotel service especially in terms of the foodLet me explain my situation in more detail, the meeting room itself was great.
>>I am writing to express my disappointment with your hotel service, especially in terms of food. Let me explain my situation in more detail. The meeting room itself was great.
There were equipped everything we needed during the meeting. Also, the room was quiet enough to have a conference and tidy.While we were happy with the facility, the food that was served for lunch was terrible.
>>Correct!
The omelet wasn’t cooked properly and the sliced mangos were too frozen to eat. So, we hardly ate our lunch. In other words, we couldn’t enjoy the food at all.
>>The omelet wasn’t cooked properly and the sliced mangoes were too frozen to eat. So, we hardly ate our lunch. In other words, we couldn’t enjoy the food at all.
After the lunch time, I asked one of your staff to explain this situation. The staff said that they missed our lunch order so they did not have time to prepare it.
>>Correct!
As you know, I have used your hotel for about two years and the meeting have been organized biweekly in your hotel. Could you make sure
>>As you know, I have used your hotel for about two years and the meeting has been organized biweekly in your hotel.
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