IELTS TASK2(1) introduce and body1
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I completely agree with the argument that science must help improve the quality of human life, and I think science is currently developing for the same purpose. However, this essay argues that scientists must consider it again because it can often produce the opposite result regardless of its purpose.
Science is always developed for the greater good of mankind. Science is always developed for the greater good of mankind. It is clear, that people can achieve what they want through scientific advances. We have been able to live a healthy life through advances in modern medicine and communicate conveniently with each other through advances in communication technology.
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I completely agree with the argument that science must help improve the quality of human life, and I think science is currently developing for the same purpose.
>>I completely agree with the idea that science should contribute to enhancing the quality of human life, and, indeed, it is currently progressing with this aim.
However, this essay argues that scientists must consider it again because it can often produce the opposite result regardless of its purpose.
>>Correct.
Science is always developed for the greater good of mankind.
Science is always developed for the greater good of mankind.
>>Correct.
It is clear, that people can achieve what they want through scientific advances.
>>It is clear that people can achieve what they want through the advancement of science.
We have been able to live a healthy life through advances in modern medicine and communicate conveniently with each other through advances in communication technology.
>>We have been able to live a healthy life through advancements in modern medicine and communicate conveniently with each other through the developement of communication technology.
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