ielts task2: Some people say that staying a hotel in a foreign country when on holiday is not the b
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There are individuals who believe that staying in a hotel in another country on holiday is not the best way to learn about the nation and local residents. From my point of view, I definitely disagree with it. How can you know local culture and people if you are staying in a hotel? Most hotels are set up with several standards such as breakfast, service, staff’s manner. Thus, we could hardly feel difference between a foreign hotel and a hotel in my country. However, Staying in a rent and shard house like an Airbnb gives you many opportunities to know about local people and custom. When you are there, you can see the host’s life style and traditions of the country.In additional, you can have some local food more easier than in a hotel. Through the food, you are able to learn a lot of their culture and traditions In conclusion, if you are interested in knowing local people and custom in other country when on vacation, you should visit to the local accommodation in stead of the hotels.
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Hi [이름]!
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Here are my corrections.
There are individuals who believe that staying in a hotel in another country on holiday is not the best way to learn about the nation and local residents.
>>There are individuals who believe that staying in a hotel in another country on a holiday is not the best way to learn about the nation and local residents.
From my point of view, I definitely disagree with it. How can you know local culture and people if you are staying in a hotel?
>>From my point of view, I definitely disagree with it. How can you know about local cultures and people if you are staying in a hotel?
Most hotels are set up with several standards such as breakfast, service, staff’s manner.
>>Most hotels are set up with several standards such as breakfast, service, considering staff’s manners.
Thus, we could hardly feel difference between a foreign hotel and a hotel in my country.
>>Thus, we could hardly feel the difference between a foreign hotel and a hotel in my country.
However, Staying in a rent and shard house like an Airbnb gives you many opportunities to know about local people and custom.
>>However, staying in a rented and shard house like Airborne gives you many opportunities to know about local people and custom.
When you are there, you can see the host’s life style and traditions of the country.In additional, you can have some local food more easier than in a hotel.
>>When you are there, you can see the host’s life style and traditions of the country. In addition, you can avail some local food easier than in a hotel.
Through the food, you are able to learn a lot of their culture and traditions In conclusion, if you are interested in knowing local people and custom in other country when on vacation, you should visit to the local accommodation in stead of the hotels.
>> Through the food, you are able to learn a lot of their culture and traditions. In conclusion, if you are interested in knowing local people and custom of other countries on vacation, you should visit local accommodations instead of hotels.
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