If a Blackout in My City...

2022-04-05 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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If there\'s a blackout in my city for 48 hours, maybe I will read the fantasy books. I used to have time to read e-books, but it takes a lot of time. So I can\'t do it often, for that reason, if given the time I will do that. Also, I will watch the downloaded drama or movie. It\'s help to pass time so fast, too. For the sake of the environment, I really wish there would be a blackout in my city at least once, anyway.

강사 첨삭

Hi Kate!
I enjoyed this composition today.
It\'s very light and clear.
It\'s also easy to read and understand.
Good job!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
If there\'s a blackout in my city for 48 hours, maybe I will read the fantasy books. 
>> If there\'s a blackout in my city for 48 hours, maybe I will read fantasy books. 
I used to have time to read e-books, but it takes a lot of time. 
>> I used to have time to read e-books, but it took a lot of time. 
So I can\'t do it often, for that reason, if given the time I will do that. 
>> So I can\'t do it often and for that reason, if given the time, I will do that. 
Also, I will watch the downloaded drama or movie. 
>> Also, I will watch downloaded shows or movies. 
It\'s help to pass time so fast, too. 
>> It will help pass the time, too. 
For the sake of the environment, I really wish there would be a blackout in my city at least once, anyway.
>> Correct

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