If I able to be a super hero,

2012-07-06 · 첨삭 강사 Aurora

학생이 쓴 원문

Hi, Alice. I’m so sorry. I had dinner with my coworker yesterday, because it was an anniversary of our company. So we had a seminar about managing work and had a steak. Also my boss got an award for 10 years of service so we drunk together with our team member to congratulate him. If I’m a super hero and have one power, I’d like to help kids who live in underdeveloped country. They used to get disease because there isn’t clear water. And they can’t finish a regular course because there aren’t enough schools and teachers. Thus I will give them clear water, nutritious meals and opportunities of learning. So I will make them to can live by themselves.

강사 첨삭

Hello there! Thank you for your composition. You really have a big and soft heart for children. Continue to become a good example to other people. Have a good day! See you in class. _T. Alice_ Hi, Alice. >> Hi Alice!I’m so sorry. >> Correct! >>I\'m so sorry. >>  I\'m very sorry.  I had dinner with my coworker yesterday, because it was an anniversary of our company. >> I had dinner with my co-worker yesterday because it was our company\'s anniversary. So we had a seminar about managing work and had a steak. >> So we had a seminar on how to manage our work and had steak after. Also my boss got an award for 10 years of service so we drunk together with our team member to congratulate him. >> My boss got an award for his 10 years of service so we drunk after to congratulate and celebrate with him.If I’m a super hero and have one power, I’d like to help kids who live in underdeveloped country. >> If I would be a super hero, I\'d like to help the kids who live in underdeveloped country. They used to get disease because there isn’t clear water. >> They acquire diseases because of unclean water. And they can’t finish a regular course because there aren’t enough schools and teachers. >> They can\'t also finish their studies because there aren\'t enough school and teachers. Thus I will give them clear water, nutritious meals and opportunities of learning. >> So I will provide them them clean water, nutritious meals and opportunities for learning. So I will make them to can live by themselves. >> I will help them build their future.

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