If I become a queen of my country.
학생이 쓴 원문
If I become a queen of my country, I will be a good queen for our citizens.
First, I will help our citizens however I can\'t go out of my castle. I will help old person, also help a poor family. I can know if I help poor person I feel so happy.
Secondly, I will make a law. I will make a law good for poor people, also good for rich people. I don\'t know now what is good law, but if I become a queen, I will find out then. What good laws are like.
강사 첨삭
Hi there Maria!
These are very good things todo to people when you become a queen. You have said them like a true queen, I am glad that you have a very good heart. SOmeday I know that even if you do not become a queen, you possess a heart of one.
See you in class!
-T. Donna =)
>> Correct!
First, I will help our citizens however I can\'t go out of my castle. I will help old person, also help a poor family. I can know if I help poor person I feel so happy.
>> First, I will help our citizens. However I can\'t go out of my castle. I will help old persons, also help a poor family. I can know if I helped a poor person because I feel so happy.
Secondly, I will make a law. I will make a law good for poor people, also good for rich people. I don\'t know now what is good law, but if I become a queen, I will find out then. What good laws are like.
>> Secondly, I will make a law. I will make a law good for poor people, also good for rich people. I don\'t know now what is a good law, but if I become a queen, I will find out then what good laws are like.
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