If I could be reborn as an animal...

2024-10-02 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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I\'m so happy just imagining that I can fly in the sky like a bird, swim in the water like a fish. What a wonderful thing. I love both of them. but I have to choose, I choice is swim. As I told you, I\'ve enjoyed diving before. At that time, I was into a water world. I felt that I\'m in the space and all organism, even rocks seemed welcoming me. I never forgot that experience yet. So I could be reborn as an animal, I wanted to be a swimming animal like dolphin.

강사 첨삭

Hello, ! ^-^ Good evening!

Thank you so much for this composition. I\'ve read it well and I have made some modifications.

In my case, I would prefer to be reborn as a bird. I\'d like to travel to a variety of destinations without having to worry about things like flights and transportation.

Also, the idiom \"to fly like a bird\" refers to the freedom to do anything you want.

I will see you later in class!

__T. Mayleen :)

I\'m so happy just imagining that I can fly in the sky like a bird, swim in the water like a fish.

>>> I\'m so happy just imagining that I can fly in the sky like a bird and swim in the water like a fish.
What a wonderful thing.

>>> CORRECT
I love both of them. but I have to choose, I choice is swim.
As I told you, I\'ve enjoyed diving before.
At that time, I was into a water world.

>>> I love both of them, but I have to choose, so my choice is to swim.

As I told you, I\'ve enjoyed diving before.

At that time, I was so into the water world.

I felt that I\'m in the space and all organism, even rocks seemed welcoming me.

>>> I felt that I\'m in space, and all organisms, even rocks, seemed to be welcoming me.

I never forgot that experience yet.

>>> I haven\'t forgotten that experience yet.

So I could be reborn as an animal, I wanted to be a swimming animal like dolphin.

>>> So if I could be reborn as an animal, I wanted to be a water animal like a dolphin.

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