If I could celebrate my birthday the way I wanted
학생이 쓴 원문
If I could celebrate my birthday the way I wanted~
It is very interesting even to imagine it. I\'ve never thought about it. But it\'s possible to celebrate my birthday the way I want, I would have a party with my family and friends on the large lawn. And someone would serve for us. There would be some tables with many kinds of food. I could enjoy my party having some food and talking with my family and friends. A beautiful music is streaming and we are surrounded with a beautiful scenery. And the weather must be good with a blue sky and soft breeze.
And one more thing is that someone or some people prepare this party without notifying me in advance. If it happened, my pleasure would be twice or three times or more t[이름] that.
And it would be a perfect birthday party.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Ms. [Name]! I hope you could finally celebrate your birthday the way you want it to be next year! T[이름]k you for sharing. Have a great weekend!
-T. Sonny
If I could celebrate my birthday the way I wanted~ It is very interesting even to imagine it.
>>If I could celebrate my birthday the way I wanted it to be.. I feel excited even just imagining it.
I\'ve never thought about it.
>>CORRECT.
OR. It never crossed my mind.
But it\'s possible to celebrate my birthday the way I want, I would have a party with my family and friends on the large lawn.
>>But, if it\'s possible for my ideal birthday celebration to come to life, I would have a party with my family and friends in a wide lawn area.
And someone would serve for us.
>>And someone would serve us.
There would be some tables with many kinds of food.
>>There would be tables filled with various food.
I could enjoy my party having some food and talking with my family and friends.
>>I could enjoy my party while having some food and talking with my family and friends.
A beautiful music is streaming and we are surrounded with a beautiful scenery.
>>Beautiful music streaming and majestic scenery surrounding us.
And the weather must be good with a blue sky and soft breeze.
>>And the weather must be clear, blue sky with soft breeze.
And one more thing is that someone or some people prepare this party without notifying me in advance.
And one more thing is that someone or some people prepare this party without notifying me in advance.
>>And one more thing, it must be prepared by others in advance without me knowing.
If it happened, my pleasure would be twice or three times or more t[이름] that.
>>If it happens, I will be over the moon!
And it would be a perfect birthday party.
And it would be a perfect birthday party.
>>CORRECT.
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