If I could live anywhere else in the world, where I would live. Why is the reason.
학생이 쓴 원문
I have a dream that I would like to have a lot of experiences living in many various countrys after I retire. I was born in Seoul and I have been living in Seoul during entire my life, therefore when I coule be free from my work responsibility, I want to live very freely, globally and actively. This one of the reason that I am still studying English even in my age.
And I am interested in foreign and exotic culture and people. I also have much curiosity about other culture, literature, nature, and various people. I want to learn many new things and knowledges from these experiences. Whenever I trevel to foreign countries, I feel new energy and emotions. Therefore I \'d like to live in new and various country as many as I can.
강사 첨삭
Hi Sue! Thank you so much for investing a little of your time with your homework. I really appreciate the effort. ^ ^
How wonderful of you to share your thoughts as well. Don\'t be bothered about your age though, you know what they say; \"age is but a number\". If you have your dreams and aspirations then go for it! I would do the same given the time and money! ^^
-Teacher Jedah
>>CORRECT (misspelled \"countries\") OR
>>I have a dream of gaining a lot of experiences traveling to different countries when I retire.
I was born in Seoul and I have been living in Seoul during entire my life, therefore when I coule be free from my work responsibility, I want to live very freely, globally and actively. (note: this sentence is a bit too wordy and long, you can make 2 sentences out of it)
>>I was born in Seoul and I have been living in Seoul my entire life.
>>Therefore, when I would be free from my work responsibility, I want to live wherever I want and actively.
This one of the reason that I am still studying English even in my age.
>>This is one of the reasons why I\'m still studying English despite my age.
And I am interested in foreign and exotic culture and people.
And I am interested in foreign and exotic culture and people.
>>CORRECT
I also have much curiosity about other culture, literature, nature, and various people.
>>CORRECT
I want to learn many new things and knowledges from these experiences.
>>CORRECT
Whenever I trevel to foreign countries, I feel new energy and emotions.
>>CORRECT (misspelled \"travel\")
Therefore I \'d like to live in new and various country as many as I can.
>>Therefore I would like to travel and live in many countries in as much as I can.
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