If I get lot of money, will I share this news?
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Someone hides their original instinct. So it is dangerous to share all secrects with people although they are close to you like freinds and family. Because some facts can make them turn around.
If you get a lot of money, willit okay to share this news?My answer is \'Yes\'. Well, as I mentioned above, people could change if things change. Someone could change their attitude to you because your money and seek opportunity to steal your money. But it is barely looking his real apprearance. The person who you think as freinds is more intimate ,in fact, money than you. Just thanks to detect person who could betray you anytime. It is not losing your freinds but he is not your friendin the first place.
And it is no problem whether someone has desire for steeling your money. When you spend amount of money, more than 1 person will know your property . It means it is essential to protect your money even if you haven\'t spoken the news. So to share the news you have gotten a lot of money is not bad.
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Someone hides their original instinct.
>> People have hidden agenda.
So it is dangerous to share all secrects with people although they are close to you like freinds and family. Because some facts can make them turn around.
>> So, it is dangerous to share secrets with people even when they are close you like your friends and family because some facts can make then turn around.
>> So, it is dangerous to share secrets with people even when they are close you like your friends and family because some facts can make then turn around.
If you get a lot of money, willit okay to share this news?
>> If you get a lot of money, is it okay to share the news.
My answer is \'Yes\'.
>> CORRECT
Well, as I mentioned above, people could change if things change.
>> CORRECT
Someone could change their attitude to you because your money and seek opportunity to steal your money. But it is barely looking his real apprearance.
>> People change how they feel about you because they like your money and they seek the opportunity to steal it and they barely see who you really are.
The person who you think as freinds is more intimate ,in fact, money than you.
>> The people who you think you are friends with, are attracted to your money.
Just thanks to detect person who could betray you anytime.
>> Just don\'t forget to be vigilant because they could betray you anytime.
It is not losing your freinds but he is not your friendin the first place.
>> It isn\'t losing a friend because he isn\'t your friend in the first place.
>> It isn\'t losing a friend because he isn\'t your friend in the first place.
And it is no problem whether someone has desire for steeling your money.
>> Also, it is not a problem if other people desire to steal your money.
When you spend amount of money, more than 1 person will know your property .
>> When you spend money, many people will know.
It means it is essential to protect your money even if you haven\'t spoken the news.
>> CORRECT
So to share the news you have gotten a lot of money is not bad.
>> So, to share the news that you have gotten a lot of money isn\'t bad.
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