If I had one million dollars.....
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ESSAY: If you were given one million dollars to spend how would you spend it? You cannot use it for yourself, family members, or friends. Discuss your ideas in an essay of 200 words. Support your ideas with reasons and examples.
If I had one million dollars I would make a forest which have a play ground children can be playing.
>>> If I had one million dollars, I would construct a forest which has a playground for children.
And also family could enjoy their time at the forest eating something spending their time with fresh air, and children can enjoy playing at the ground without worry about car and any other risks can be hurts.
>>> Moreover, my family could enjoy their time at the forest eating something spending their time with fresh air, and children can enjoy playing at the playground without worrying about cars or any other accidents that can hurt them.
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