If i have a spend a time with famous person

2021-11-03 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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If I have a spend a time of one day with famous person, I\'ll with the Beyonce. Beyonce is my roll model. When I was middle school 1st grade, I was watched the youtube in Beyonce\'s billboard awards live video and half time show live video. And then I fall in love in to her. She\'s live is very powerful and stable. If I have a spend a time with her, I want vocal and dancing lesson. And I wonder how about the top stars life.

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Great choice. :) 

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If I have a spend a time of one day with famous person, I\'ll with the Beyonce.
>> If I can spend a day with a famous person, it\'ll be Beyoncé. 

Beyonce is my roll model.
>> Beyoncé is my role model. 

When I was middle school 1st grade, I was watched the youtube in Beyonce\'s billboard awards live video and half time show live video.
>> When I was in first grade middle school, I always watched Beyoncé\'s Billboard awards videos on YouTube. 

And then I fall in love in to her.
>> I fell inlove with her. 

She\'s live is very powerful and stable.
>> She lives a powerful and stable life. 

If I have a spend a time with her, I want vocal and dancing lesson.
>> If I can spend some time with her, I want to do some vocal and dancing lessons. 

And I wonder how about the top stars life.
>> And I will ask her what it\'s like to live like a star.

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