If I was reborn
학생이 쓴 원문
If I was reborn, I wanted to born an American boy.
I seem to like their culture and mind as I've ever seen.
Of course, I like Korea, being girl too but there is still sexism in our country.
And I often feel that there is limit as female.
I have lots of things to do I want.
But because I'm female, I can't do lots of things.
It's really unfair and the reasons let me assume a defiant attitude.
강사 첨삭
Hi there [이름]^^
Wow! I was surprised with your answer.
I think a lot of people would aim to be an American if given a chance.
I never thought that you would think of being a boy.^^
Sexism is one common thing in Asian countries.
The worst thing is women are povoked of some priviledges.
Thank you for your ideas [이름].
Take care^^
T.Debby^^
Here are my corrections for you:
If I was reborn, I wanted to born an American boy.
>> If i were reborn, I would want to be born as an American boy.I seem to like their culture and mind as I\'ve ever seen.
>> I seem to like their culture and mind as I\'ve seen it.Of course, I like Korea, being girl too but there is still sexism in our country.
>> CORRECT
OR> Of course, I like Korea, and I like being girl too but sexism in our country makes me thing otherwise.And I often feel that there is limit as female.
>> And I often feel that there is limit as a female.I have lots of things to do I want.
>> I have lots of things that I want to do.
But because I\'m female, I can\'t do lots of things.
>> CORRECT
OR> Being a girl stops me from doing it.It\'s really unfair and the reasons let me assume a defiant attitude.
>> CORRECT
OR> I think that ther is injustice and it make me feel offended.
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