If I was reborn

2014-05-15 · 첨삭 강사 Debby

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If I was reborn, I wanted to born an American boy. I seem to like their culture and mind as I've ever seen. Of course, I like Korea, being girl too but there is still sexism in our country. And I often feel that there is limit as female. I have lots of things to do I want. But because I'm female, I can't do lots of things. It's really unfair and the reasons let me assume a defiant attitude.

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름]^^   Wow! I was surprised with your answer. I think a lot of people would aim to be an American if given a chance. I never thought that you would think of being a boy.^^   Sexism is one common thing in Asian countries. The worst thing is women are povoked of some priviledges.   Thank you for your ideas [이름]. Take care^^   T.Debby^^   Here are my corrections for you:   If I was reborn, I wanted to born an American boy. >> If i were reborn, I would want to be born as an American boy.I seem to like their culture and mind as I\'ve ever seen. >> I seem to like their culture and mind as I\'ve seen it.Of course, I like Korea, being girl too but there is still sexism in our country. >> CORRECT OR> Of course, I like Korea, and I like being girl too but sexism in our country makes me thing otherwise.And I often feel that there is limit as female. >> And I often feel that there is limit as a female.I have lots of things to do I want. >> I have lots of things that I want to do. But because I\'m female, I can\'t do lots of things. >> CORRECT OR> Being a girl stops me from doing it.It\'s really unfair and the reasons let me assume a defiant attitude. >> CORRECT OR> I think that ther is injustice and it make me feel offended.

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