if I were a lyricist...
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If I could write a song, it would be about the King of the Joseon. Especially, I like Jeongjo, so I want to write lyrics about his filial affection. I think the major thing would be the mind and thought on his way to his father\'s grave. the reason why I want to write it is that I like Korean traditional melody so I think the song would be fantastic with these lyrics.
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Hi there [이름]!
Thank you for answering my question!
I think it\'s very soothing when listening to traditional songs.
I hope you will be able to make it if you want.
I hope you enjoy your day and weekend!
See you next time too!
If I could write a song, it would be about the King of the Joseon.
>>CORRECT
Especially, I like Jeongjo, so I want to write lyrics about his filial affection.
>>I especially like Jeongjo so I want to write lyrics about his filial affection.
I think the major thing would be the mind and thought on his way to his father\'s grave.
>>I think the major thing would be his thoughts on his way to his father\'s grave.
The reason why I want to write it is that I like Korean traditional melody so I think the song would be fantastic with these lyrics.
>>CORRECT
OR >>The reason why I want to write this is that I like the Korean traditional melodies so I think the song would be fantastic with these lyrics.
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