If I were a musician,

2021-01-14 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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If I were a musician, I would be Beethoven. Because he is the one who lived and died for music only. He was a true musician who expressed his inner feelings in music. He played music and composed until his death, despite losing his hearing. So I respect him and love his music.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름] Ha!
I\'m not really into classical music.
However, I can understand Beethoven\'s passion.
It is something to be admired.
The same goes for your writing.
See you tomorrow!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
If I were a musician, I would be Beethoven.
>> Correct
Because he is the one who lived and died for music only.
>> It\'s because he is the one who lived and died only for music.
He was a true musician who expressed his inner feelings in music.
>> He was a true musician who expressed his inner feelings through music.
He played music and composed until his death, despite losing his hearing.
>> He played music and composed despite losing his hearing until his death.
So I respect him and love his music.
>> So I respect him and I love his music.

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