If I were given a week off

2020-10-13 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

학생이 쓴 원문

It\'s a real dream in the current situation like Corona outbreak. If I were given a week off, I would like to visit Switzerland. I really want to go to places where I can see great natural scenery like Switzerland, New Zealand and Austria. It would be nice if I was alone. I love my family so much, but sometimes I want to travel alone.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! This was a great essay although I need you to focus more on you sentence construction and usage of your punctuations marks. Keep up the good work. :)

-Teacher Elise

If I were given a week off, I would like to visit Switzerland.
>> If I were given a week off, I would like to visit Switzerland. 
It\'s a real dream in the current situation like Corona outbreak.
>>It\'s a dream in the current situation like the Corona Outbreak. 
I really want to go to places where I can see great natural scenery like Switzerland, New Zealand and Austria.
>>I really want to go to places where I can see great natural sceneries like Switzerland, New Zealand and Australia.

It would be nice if I was alone.
>>It would be nice if I could go alone. 

I love my family so much, but sometimes I want to travel alone.
>>I love my family so much but sometimes I want to travel alone and have some \"me\" time. 

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