If i won 2 milion dollars in the lottery

2019-12-16 · 첨삭 강사 Avery

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If i won in the lottery, i will buy apartment. Thesedays, korea has the problem of rising house expenses but society economic situation is bad. So all of people think property is the only solution to be rich and i think so too. Therefore i will make more money by investing lottery to real estate

강사 첨삭

Hi there, Ms. [이름]! I\'m glad you were able to send in your composition. Writing is as important as speaking.

Therefore we must practice this skill from time to time, too. ^^

I agree that buying a property is a practical way to spend your prize money.

Tell me more tomorrow. Have a wonderful day. See you! ^_^

~T.Avery

If i won in the lottery, i will buy apartment.

>> If I won in the lottery, I will buy an apartment.
Thesedays, korea has the problem of rising house expenses but society economic situation is bad.

>> These days, Korea has the problem of rising living expenses but the society\'s economic situation is still bad.
So all of people think property is the only solution to be rich and i think so too.

>> Most people think that owning a property is the only solution to be rich, and I think so too.
Therefore i will make more money by investing lottery to real estate

>> Therefore, I will make more money by investing my lottery prize to real estate.

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