If I won a million dollars!

2019-03-11 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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After I became a adult, I buy lotteries sometimes. But I think that I\'m not a lucky person because I\'ve never won. Nevertheless, if I won a million dollars, I will buy a building. And I will never tell that. Then, I will donate money and go on a travel with my family. Also, I will buy presents for my family, friends and poor people.

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~~ Teacher Sharon

After I became a adult, I buy lotteries sometimes.

>> I started buying lottery tickets when I became an adult.
But I think that I\'m not a lucky person because I\'ve never won.

>> I do think that I\'m unlucky because I have never won.
Nevertheless, if I won a million dollars, I will buy a building.

>>  Nevertheless, if I win a million dollars, I will buy a building.
And I will never tell that.

>> I will never tell others of this fact.
Then, I will donate money and go on a travel with my family.

>>  Then, I will donate my money and go travelling with my family.
Also, I will buy presents for my family, friends and poor people.

>>  I will buy presents for my family, friends and poor people.

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