If someone asked you to be a journalist, what kind of stories would you write about?
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I would write a journal on education. The title is \" Is education system as good as it is?\"
I know there\'s no perfect or flawless system that everybody can be satisfied with. However, the current education reality is too mean for students and their parents. Too much money and time are wasted. If Korean government can\'t succeed in upgrading the system, happiness index is be lowered.
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I would write a journal on education. The title is \" Is education system as good as it is?\"
>> I would write a journal on education and title it Is Education System As Good As It Is?
I know there\'s no perfect or flawless system that everybody can be satisfied with.
>> or: The existence of a perfect or flawless system that can please everyone is something that we could only dream of in our lifetime.
However, the current education reality is too mean for students and their parents.
>> or: However, the current education reality is more detrimental than beneficial to students and their parents.
Too much money and time are wasted.
>> correct
If Korean government can\'t succeed in upgrading the system, happiness index is be lowered.
>> If the Korean government does not succeed in upgrading the system, the happiness index will steadily decline.
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