If someone design my life
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Jay,
That\'s right! You need to make your own decisions so that you\'ll have no regrets in the end.
~Lynn
Everyone has their own goal in their life and they do many things to achieve it.
>> Everyone has their own goal in life and they do many things to achieve it.
To achieve the goal of their life, they design or plan something.
>> correct!
OR>> To achieve their goals, they design or plan something.
If I don\'t have goal of my life and also don\'t have no idea for planning my life, my thoughts tend to be shaken easily.
>> If I don\'t have a goal in life and I don\'t have no idea in planning my life, my thoughts tend to be shaken easily.
As a result, someone can control my thoughts and use my life to help or assist their life.
>> correct!
In short, my life would be a supporting actor, not a leading actor, in \'life\' drama.
>> correct!
I think everyone deserves to be happy and enjoy their life, so they need to be concerned about themselves if they don\'t want someone to design or control their life.
>> correct!
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