If someone were to visit your hometown for a day, what itinerary would you suggest for them?
학생이 쓴 원문
If someone would visit my hometown, I would recommend Hwa-sung castle.
It is designated world heritage by Unesco.
It is made almost Three hundred years ago, and we still have a manual of this castle.
That\'s why this castle is a world heritage.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! I\'ve heard about this castle. I heard how wonderful it is and that tourists come from around the world to get to see it and take photos.
~~Teacher Ryka^^
If someone would visit my hometown, I would recommend Hwa-sung castle.
>>If someone were to visit my hometown, I would recommend Hwa-sung Castle.
It is designated world heritage by Unesco.
It is designated world heritage by Unesco.
>>It is designated as a World Heritage site by UNESCO.
It is made almost Three hundred years ago, and we still have a manual of this castle.
It is made almost Three hundred years ago, and we still have a manual of this castle.
>>It was built almost three hundred years ago, and we still have the original manual for this castle.
That\'s why this castle is a world heritage.
That\'s why this castle is a world heritage.
>>That\'s why it is a World Heritage site.
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