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2018-03-15 · 첨삭 강사 Eunice

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Babies and children are unpredictable, we don't know what kind action they will do soon. Many people in Korea told that the education at home cause the behavior of children. If child were rude in public or restaurant, people might blame his/her parents. I think being naughty is baby's nature, so I do not want to scold them. I would rather explaining what parents want to continuously. Punishment is always wrong, especially for children. Parents have to learn about the way of waiting, explaining and must give them complements even if they did small things. I have a two children, I have learned a lot from them. They are my teacher and They make me more growing up.

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Babies and children are unpredictable, we don\'t know what kind action they will do soon.
>> Babies and children are unpredictable, we don\'t know what kind of action they will do soon.
Many people in Korea told that the education at home cause the behavior of children.

>> Many people in Korea said that the education at home causes the behavior of children. 

If child were rude in public or restaurant, people might blame his/her parents.

>> If a child is rude in public or in the restaurant, people might blame his/her parents.

I think being naughty is baby\'s nature, so I do not want to scold them.

>> I think being naughty is in baby\'s nature, so I do not want to scold them.

I would rather explaining what parents want to continuously.

>> I would rather explain what parents want to do continuously.

Punishment is always wrong, especially for children.
>> Correct!

Parents have to learn about the way of waiting, explaining and must give them complements even if they did small things. 

>> Parents have to learn about the way of waiting, explain it to them patiently and we must give them complements even if they did small things.

I have a two children, I have learned a lot from them.

>> I have two children and I have learned a lot from them.

They are my teacher and They make me more growing up.

>> They are my teacher and they make me grow more. 

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