If you are going to make a song, what would it be about and who are you dedicating it to?

2021-07-14 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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If i am going to make a song. I will make for a hard person. because sometimes when I hard something, I listen to song that give to me cheer up. So of my experience, I hope song that I make other people healing.

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That\'s a great answer! This can really uplift your and other people\'s spirits. :) 

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If i am going to make a song. I will make for a hard person. 
>> If I am going to make a song, I will dedicate it for people who are having a hard time. 

because sometimes when I hard something, I listen to song that give to me cheer up. 
>> Sometimes, when I am having a  hard time, I listen to a song and it cheers me up. 

So of my experience, I hope song that I make other people healing.
>> So based on my experience, I hope to make a song to heal other people. 

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