If you are going to save up some money for something, what would it be and why?
학생이 쓴 원문
Now, I am making money.
However, when I am retired that I have to need money for my later years.
That why I am saving up for my retirement.
We are living until 100 years old.
It is important to prepare my later years from now on.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! We really need to save up for our future. Aim high and reach your goal. :)
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However, when I am retired that I have to need money for my later years.
We are living until 100 years old.
It is important to prepare my later years from now on.
Now, I am making money.
>> CORRECT
or: I\'m already making money now.
However, when I am retired that I have to need money for my later years.
>> However, when I retire, I need to have money for my later years.
That why I am saving up for my retirement.
>>CORRECT
We are living until 100 years old.
>> We might live probably up to a 100 years old.
It is important to prepare my later years from now on.
>>It is important to prepare for my later years from now on.
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